GOVERNOR AR-NOLD SCWARTZ-EN-EGG-ER IS BRINGING A GRIZZLY BEAR BACK TO CALIFORNIA.
WHILE AT AN ART GALLERY DURING A FUND RAISING TRIP IN COLORADO, THE GOVERNOR SAW A LARGE BRONZE STATUE OF A GRIZZLY BEAR. HE LIKED IT SO MUCH, HE DECIDED THAT HE HAD TO HAVE IT. SO HE PURCHASED IT AND SHIPPED IT BACK TO CALIFORNIA WITH HIS OWN MONEY.
THE STATUE OF THE GRIZZLY BEAR, WHICH IS THE SAME BEAR THAT IS ON THE CALIFORNIA STATE FLAG, IS NOW PLACED IN THE CAPITOL BUILDING IN SACRAMENTO IN FRONT OF THE GOVERNOR'S SUITE FOR VISITOR'S OF THE CAPITOL BUILDING TO ENJOY.
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ReplyDeleteKeep your sentences simple. Avoid long introductory clauses: THE GOVERNOR SAW A LARGE BRONZE STATUE OF A GRIZZLY BEAR AT AN ART GALLERY IN COLORADO DURING A FUND-RAISING TRIP.
Keep your sentences short. Divide that long last sentence/paragraph in two to make it easier to read and understand.
I think it's preferable to put a pronunciation guide in parentheses after the correctly spelled name.
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